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Suddenly his arm leapt up, the fist clenched, and his eyes blazed at her. She shrank away, pale and frightened. But he dropped his fist to his side, turned, and went out, muttering 去书内
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  • 杨文美 杨文美

    “his arm leapt up, the fist clenched, and his eyes blazed at her” 是并列的动作描写 ，通过 “leapt up”“clenched”“blazed” 连续的动作 ，快速推进情节，呈现冲突瞬间的紧张；“She shrank away, pale and frightened” 中，“pale and frightened” 是形容词短语作伴随状态 ，和 “shrank away” 共同展现她的反应 ；“dropped his fist to his side, turned, and went out” 同样是连续动作的并列 ，清晰呈现他从愤怒到克制离开的行为过程 ，“muttering” 现在分词作伴随，补充离开时的状态 ，让人物行为逻辑连贯。

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