I hastily gathered up my belongings, that I might escape as quickly as
possible; the pain was too great. I looked round for my hat. There it
was, on the writing-table, beside the vase with the white roses, my
roses. I had an irresistible desire to make a last effort to awaken your memory.
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1. 标点：“I hastily gathered up my belongings, that I might escape as quickly as possible; the pain was too great.” 中“that”前不应加逗号。 2. 重复：“beside the vase with the white roses, my roses.” 表述重复，可改为“beside the vase with the white roses—my roses.” 。 3. 用词：“make a last effort” 稍显啰嗦，可换成 “make one last attempt” 。
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